This time, I really liked all the lines in parentheses. It's a clever way to underline the fact that what people say often isn't exactly what they mean or what they think. I liked the idea of the parentheses because - hrm, because - they act like a very small barrier between the 'truthier' part of the text and the rest. A few too many and it might've been too much but you left just enough space between the lines that it worked.
Truthier? Really? English fail.
I really love Germany in this. I think he would be a very, very hard character to write. You don't have to be a history major to know that stuff was pretty bad during the second world war. I think it's a hard line for people to walk along - how to talk about that kind of history honestly without, well, being reduced to unpleasant balls of angst.
“It’s the wall they’re building,” he abruptly confesses. “I just can’t stand to look at it.”
I don't know why I like that line so much but I do. Maybe it's because you can almost hear how Germany says that all in a rush. (And I love how he misses his brother; yes, yes I do. Family themes are oddly lovely in Hetalia).
I also like the contrast you end up making between Germany & Austria. Germany goes to talk to someone who understands; Austria goes to talk to someone who knows nothing about any of it. Denial & avoidance much, Austria?
Is it wrong that I think that Austria just really needs to go get laid? I mean, honestly Austria - how can you make a refrigerator sound angsty? Someone needs to get that boy good and drunk and have a rough tumble in the hay with him. XD
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Date: 2010-01-08 03:07 pm (UTC)This time, I really liked all the lines in parentheses. It's a clever way to underline the fact that what people say often isn't exactly what they mean or what they think. I liked the idea of the parentheses because - hrm, because - they act like a very small barrier between the 'truthier' part of the text and the rest. A few too many and it might've been too much but you left just enough space between the lines that it worked.
Truthier? Really? English fail.
I really love Germany in this. I think he would be a very, very hard character to write. You don't have to be a history major to know that stuff was pretty bad during the second world war. I think it's a hard line for people to walk along - how to talk about that kind of history honestly without, well, being reduced to unpleasant balls of angst.
“It’s the wall they’re building,” he abruptly confesses. “I just can’t stand to look at it.”
I don't know why I like that line so much but I do. Maybe it's because you can almost hear how Germany says that all in a rush. (And I love how he misses his brother; yes, yes I do. Family themes are oddly lovely in Hetalia).
I also like the contrast you end up making between Germany & Austria. Germany goes to talk to someone who understands; Austria goes to talk to someone who knows nothing about any of it. Denial & avoidance much, Austria?
Is it wrong that I think that Austria just really needs to go get laid? I mean, honestly Austria - how can you make a refrigerator sound angsty? Someone needs to get that boy good and drunk and have a rough tumble in the hay with him. XD
Just sayin'. ;)
-T. pirate